Ami's Hoard

Okay, let me get my issue out first. It is more about personal preference regarding technical aspect of the writing.

Ms. White seemed to like writing LONG paragraphs (honestly, that is why I haven't finished reading her other story, even if that one is only 8k long). When I say long, it consists probably > 10 sentences. Once, I even counted one paragraph with 20 sentences!!

I know that there is no standard in how long a paragraph should be. BUT, reflecting to my own (emphasis in MY) experience in reading, long-winded paragraphs tend to make me lose focus on the story. It's hard for me to concentrate if a paragraph takes almost half-screen of my .pdf page (or in Kindle case, needs several screen-touches to finish it). I admit that I was itching to break down those long paragraphs myself, just to make my reading life much easier *lol*.

Of course, there are authors who also write long paragraphs, but somehow, it feels more distracting here. Maybe because Ms. White is a new-to-me author? So I have yet familiarize myself with her voice...

ANYWAY! My aversion towards long paragraphs aside, I loved this story!! It was definitely one of my most favorites from the event so far. It had NONE of the usual clichés of contemporary MMs. It felt refreshing (as slash fan-fictions could be), light, easy breezy, natural and down-to-earth.

It was so easy to being charmed by Max and Stefan. Their relationship started as friendship and it was genuine joy reading their friendly activities -- from going to the zoo, to the roller-skating, to the dancing (very creative moments, Ms. White!). There was none of those insta-love crap. NONE of my pet peeves were present (no baby as endearment, thank you God!). The female friends were likable as well. The ending was particularly sweet.

I loved how Max's come to conclusion on how he really loved Stefan came without much angst. While internal struggle could be an appealing storyline, but there are times where I agree with Max when it comes to labeling. Gay, straight, bi-sexual ... labels, schmabels. I just want to read about LOVE. Love is love, love is genderless, and it's really satisfying to read about it here.

I loved the use of some contemporary popular culture reference. I loved the dialogs -- again, it felt so natural, and there were definitely some worth being highlighted. I loved, LOVED the animals too (bring me animals in my book and I'm a happy camper). I could do with one on-page sex scenes (yes, OMG, Ami is asking for sex scene, go figure!) but I was still fine without it *grin*

So yep, one feel-good story that managed to draw big smile on my face, Ms. White. I approved.



PS: I do have one question. Who is John?!? Why he is never mentioned again?